[quote=kona_yuki_jp]hello,... :) [blush]attempted again on Nihonggo,... desperately needed a comment on my translation [dohh]
don\'t you think i should have used \"scream\" instead of \"shout\" on the second line?
thanks for coming :)[/quote]

Japanese term \'sakebu\' contains more emotional and fearful feeling -80 % than just making a loud voice -20 %, so if I were you I would choose \' scream\'

But this is of course based on personal preference. Shout is obviously acceptable.